IELTS : یک نمونه رایتینگ Task 2 - Opinion Essay و تحلیل آن

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It is a highly debatable issue whether the government should spend money on medicine andeducation rather than on theatres and sports stadiums. In my opinion, all these things are
important for the people, and therefore the government should allocate equal resources for both.

در پاراگراف مقدمه،نویسنده به دو جمله پرداخته است. جمله اول به معرفی موضوع اختصاص دارد که ناتوانی نویسنده در آن مشخص است چون از عبارت کلیشه it is irrefutable that ... استفاده کرده است که مشخص است رایتینگ مکانیکی و غیر طبیعی ست. جمله دوم که نظر نویسنده میباشد جمله ی خوبی میباشد چون هم به سوال به طور کامل پاسخ میدهد و هم از کلمات سوال استفاده نشده است.

Basic medical care is very important for the general public. If people are healthy, there will be more productivity of work and the country will prosper as a whole. There are many
people who live below the poverty line and it is the government’s responsibility that they should receive medical aid whenever needed. There are also the elderly who have paid
taxes throughout their working life and now need good medical care.
Good education facilities are also the duty of the government. Today, there are a number of children from deprived backgrounds who get substandard education. They would definitely
require a high quality of education if they are to succeed in later life. What is more, an educated society has less crime and violence and the country gets good recognition in the
whole world if its people are educated.
On the other hand, theatres and sports stadiums are equally essential for people. Art andentertainment is also a basic human need. Theatrical shows provide entertainment and at
the same time preserve our culture and tradition. Our artists earn name and fame for our country. Sports stadiums, similarly, attract millions of spectators to watch matches every
year. Many more millions watch games on television, read about them in newspapers, and discuss them with their friends. Therefore, we cannot say that these are unnecessary
expenditures and therefore the government should ignore them.

پاراگراف دوم، سوم و چهارم به درستی با یک جمله شروع میشوند که main idea پاراگرافها میباشند. سپس با استفاده از دلیل و مثال نویسنده به نوشتن پاراگراف ها پرداخته است.به ربط دهنده ها دقت کنید. جملات به خوبی به هم وصل میشوند.

To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that, medicine and education are needs that we recognize, but theatrical or sports events are also basic needs. Therefore governments should allocate resources for both these things.

پاراگراف نتیجه گیری یا conclusion شامل دو جمله میباشد که در اولی نویسنده به اهمیت موضوع پرداخته و در دومی نظر خود اعلام میکند ولی متاسفانه کلمات را دوباره را تکرار میکند و قادر به paraphrase  کردن جملات نیست.

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